Gluttony: Fanfiction :: Indulge Yourself!

Name: Leslie (Signed) · Date: 11/08/2010 05:35 am · Chapter: Chapter 4

I really liked this chapter, especially the fact that Cera discovered that not only can she travel through the Planes of Hell, but that she can call upon Astaroth in her own dream world whenever she so chooses. I also liked how you're slowly easing her into her role as a Demon Princess. She still can't get over the fact Demons don't have morals, but she did feel better once she had punished Astaroth before taking mercy on him. Over all, great chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more. Great job! 10/10

Author's Response:
As you are well aware, there is lots to come that's already prewritten. I'm so glad you like Cera and how she's slowly accepting that she's not human. A her struggle with morality is a huge part of this novel regardless of how others look at things. I'm also glad you really liked this chapter.

Name: Leslie (Signed) · Date: 11/08/2010 05:14 am · Chapter: Chapter 3

Another great chapter; it was well paced and I like how you've described the plane of Hell that she was on and how different it was from what she had imagined Hell would be like. I'm curious what the other planes are like now that we, the readers, know of two of them. I'm also curious as to how this Dr. Cromwell can help. Over all, great job with this chapter. 10/10

Author's Response:
I'm not sure the other Planes of Hell ever come into the novel to be honest. I think they are only mentioned in passing but Cera never ventures there. It may actualy end up being part of the sequel. Haha, you'll have to wait and see about Cromwell, I won't give anything away in terms of her. Thanks for the review!

Name: Leslie (Signed) · Date: 11/08/2010 04:40 am · Chapter: Chapter 2

Hey, back to review ch. 2 and I really did liked this chapter. I thought you did a great job with the narration from Cera's perspective and how she suddenly slipped away. Then, I liked how it was her mother she heard calling her, along with her mother's shadow that she started running toward that only got further until it was no longer there. You did a great job with keeping up the suspense in this chapter and I am most definitely hooked after reading this chapter. It seems to get better the more you read. :) Over all, great job. 10/10

Author's Response:
Awe, thanks Leslie. I'm really glad you like the second chapter. I hope the suspence remains throughout the novel, because there should be a lot! lol

Thanks for the review, I'm really glad you liked this, it means a lot.

Name: Leslie (Signed) · Date: 10/08/2010 04:52 am · Chapter: Prologue & Chapter One

I really like how you've started this story off with the prologue being before Cera was born and then fast forwarding to her as a child. Also, excellent flow of narration, especially when Cero is pondering why her mother doesn't go above and beyond to spend time with her. It matches up with how her mother felt about being chosen to carry this child, Cero. Over all, you did a great job really starting this story with the thought of drawing in the reader the moment they begin reading. 10/10

Author's Response:
Thanks Leslie! You're a doll. I really didn't want to start off the novel right from where Cera was a teenager wondering why her mother hated her. I think this way, it gives the readers insight into how Myra works and why - in later years - the woman dislikes her own 'daughter'.

I'm really glad you liked the prologue and first chapter!

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